Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In contemporary settings, the vast majority of guardians have been attaching more importance to their offspring’s academic education.
Therefore
, they believe that children
should engage in some activities
with educational value. However
, I believe that this
is detrimental to their upbringing.
It is understandable that spending free time on this
kind of activities
enables children
to obtain a reputable academic qualification in the future and gain an edge in the job market. To be more specific, children
who devote enough hours to academic activities
are more likely to get high marks and be admitted to well-known universities. Thus
, compared to those underachievers with a low score, they have a higher possibility of achieving promising career prospects, especially in China, a country with an enormous population and ruthless competition.
However
, this
will make children
lose the chance / opportunity to relax themselves and lead to / result in some undesirable consequences. On the one hand, this
daily routine may result in a sedentary lifestyle which the majority of school children
are adopting, and thus
increase the possibilities of them suffering from some diseases like obesity, poor eyesight and lethargy which damage their health. On the other hand
, if students are required to focus on their academic activities
for several hours on end, they are more likely to feel exhausted or bored, resulting in low working efficiency. By contrast
, if they are allowed to do some recreational activities
during or after school hours, their brains can be discharged, and they will have a refreshed mind, facilitating their academic learning and thus
making them capable of concentrating on learning subjects.
In conclusion, while focusing on academic activities
may have a minor chance of helping students achieve outstanding academic performance and promising career prosperity, it brings about more drawbacks including health problems and lack of focus in studies.Submitted by saifuddin.abdulrehman on
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