Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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think that modern life is too much
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and
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fact has a negative influence on families.
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statement because nowadays most of
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odern
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have no
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for their family members due to the great workload and
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often take out their anger of them. Most of the modern
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are
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workaholics
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and spend little
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with their spouses. Married couples nowadays
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high career expectations and spend a great deal of
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working in offices and other establishments. Their tight schedules
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not allow them to spend even their spare
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with their
husbunds
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husbands
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wives
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and children that may result in divorce and distrust to parents from the part of
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oung generation.
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, a recent Cambridge University survey found that
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52% of British married couples filed for divorce in 2019 because of the lack of work-life balance. Modern
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often tend to take out a tention and
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stress
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life on their spouses and children. It is obvious that individuals may often be in bad mood because of their work, problems with public transport or even accidents in supermarkets. By facing
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negative situations every day,
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become extremely stressful and anxious and start
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take out
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negative
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energy
on their siblings that has a negative impact on family relationship. According to the Economist, almost 80% of modern
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have ever had family issues because of
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igh level of
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tension
and anxiety. In conclusion, a
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hustling
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life has a negative effect on the family lives of modern
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because they almost have no
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for their siblings due to their workloads and often take out their negative emotions on their
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wives
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, husbands and children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern life
  • fast pace
  • stress
  • negative effect
  • family bonds
  • working hours
  • conflicts
  • advancements in technology
  • distract
  • family time
  • financial pressures
  • living standards
  • strain
  • individuals
  • family activities
  • traditions
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