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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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This
 essay aims to discuss whether old-fashion values
such
 as kindness, honesty have lost value
today
 and if they had been replaced with social status and material possession. I am inclined to believe
that is
 true, which will be presented throughout the examples and arguments.
Firstly
, with the easier access
of
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 goods from all over the world, material possession has become more intriguing for everybody.
Furthermore
,
this
 admiration has increased even more with the growing popularity of mass social media, where everyone seems to post pictures about the wealth which can be observed through the expensive cars, holidays, clothing, etc.
Secondly
, the comfort of materialism has led to a negative outcome of the society, most evidently on the degradation of the importance of the values. Unlike
today
,
people
 used to rely on other
people
 in a tough situation, while
today
 the human approach has been replaced with the item.
Consequently
, more and more
people
 are suffering from depression, anxiety.
In addition
,
people
today
 are not being able anymore to distinguish a good person from a bad, mostly because the
second
 one has more wealth, and
therefore
 it guarantees a better social status. All in all, it is observable that traditional values are losing importance
today
, namely due to mass consumption and the accessibility of the items. As evidence the new material imaginary world has been established, which has more disadvantages on human beings than benefits.
Furthermore
,
this
 trend does not seem to decrease, but it is something that will worsen with the upcoming years, decades, and generations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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