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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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 as kindness, honesty have lost value
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 and if they had been replaced with social status and material possession. I am inclined to believe
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 true, which will be presented throughout the examples and arguments.
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, with the easier access
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 goods from all over the world, material possession has become more intriguing for everybody.
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,
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 admiration has increased even more with the growing popularity of mass social media, where everyone seems to post pictures about the wealth which can be observed through the expensive cars, holidays, clothing, etc.
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, the comfort of materialism has led to a negative outcome of the society, most evidently on the degradation of the importance of the values. Unlike
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,
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 used to rely on other
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 in a tough situation, while
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 the human approach has been replaced with the item.
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, more and more
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 are suffering from depression, anxiety.
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 are not being able anymore to distinguish a good person from a bad, mostly because the
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 one has more wealth, and
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 it guarantees a better social status. All in all, it is observable that traditional values are losing importance
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, namely due to mass consumption and the accessibility of the items. As evidence the new material imaginary world has been established, which has more disadvantages on human beings than benefits.
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,
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 trend does not seem to decrease, but it is something that will worsen with the upcoming years, decades, and generations.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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