First some people think that it is responsibilities of governments to take care of the environment while other believe that it is responsibility of the citizens discuss both views and give your opinion
nevertheless
, in present
Era clean and green Correct article usage
the present
atmosphere
is vital for society
segment of society
believe that it is the responsibility of Correct article usage
the authority
authority
to take care of the Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
atmosphere
while
other
points that it is Fix the agreement mistake
others
responsibility
of the locals I would like to deliver both Add an article
the responsibility
the
arguments before forming an opinion
Correct article usage
apply
To begin
with,the atmosphere
is essential for the society
to be setting society
to be clean in the layer of air and ground which is good for society
maintenance of the earth
Change noun form
earth's
atmosphere
is depend
mainly Wrong verb form
depends
by
the government to bring Change preposition
on
such
laws to take care of atmosphere
creating Correct article usage
the atmosphere
issues
by the public transport are increasing the status of the dirty and harmful atmosphere
which is not healthy for the society
for example
traffic on the roads creating noise pollution as well as
pollution Hans government might bring some laws to be controlled such
atmospheric issues
On the other hand
issues
of atmospheric is
increasing which is not good for Correct subject-verb agreement
are
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
so citizens should also
help to maintain or control atmospheric issues
by giving contributes
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contributing
such
as use
public transport to visit places and by avoiding Wrong verb form
using
the
plastic bad which is the worst stops and use product which is recyclable for the more manufacturing of products are in larger scale creating the Correct article usage
apply
issues
of atmospheric by reducing the production in less amount and working time of factories thus
citizens have to aware of atmospheric issues
and help to reduce it
To conclude
considering all the points mentioned above government
must bring some laws to reduce the atmospheric Correct article usage
the government
issues
but also
citizens of society
may also
aware
of that and create Add a missing verb
be aware
good
Add an article
a good
atmosphere
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure a complete understanding of the question. While the essay addresses both views, the explanation could be more detailed with well-elaborated examples and clearer connections to the points being made.
coherence cohesion
Work on coherence and cohesion by using linking words more effectively to connect ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. This will help in presenting a well-organized argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps structure your argument effectively.
task achievement
Both viewpoints are addressed, showing a balanced consideration of the essay prompt.
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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