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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them . Others think that there are better ways to show that we care .Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nevertheless
, presents are different
way
 to
show
love
 to people around us . A segment of society believes that giving gifts and presents is the better
way
 to
show
 our affection for our near and dear ones , other opine that there are effective methods to
show
 that we
care
.I agree with
this
 statement and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs .
To begin
 with,some individuals thought that
this
 is a better
way
 to
show
 your
care
 to family and buddies. A person can make his
relationship
 stronger by giving flairs and presents on some special occasions to exemplify marriages , birthday parties , anniversaries and baby showers . To illustrate people giving expensive items to family members express their feelings and
love
 . Few individuals build a new
relationship
 by giving some precious gifts to each other .The argument is that since they are miles apart Nothing can prove their
love
 as well as these gifts . On the flip side , other people think that there are various ways other than gifting to
show
love
.Some Indian families the daughter in law
show
 caring nature serving her inlaws and looking after them.
Likewise
 , son in law may provide his wife's parents.
As a result
Add a comma
,
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a family bonding increase and build a healthy strong
relationship
. The quality time spends with family and friend's is a better
way
 to
show
 affection and
care
 . In my opinion,expensive things are not always necessary to reveal affection .The other method
such
 as spending precious time with loving dear ones and taking
care
 of physically and emotion play's an important role in showing
care
 . In conclusion , a gift sometimes
show
 serves as a means to
show
c
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a
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aring nature,especially long-distance
relationship
.
Otherwise
 spend quality time with family is a better
way
 to
show
 we
care
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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