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Nowadays some workplace tend to employ equal number of men and women workers . Do you think it is positive and negative development

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In today's contemporary world, gender
equality
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 has become a debatable issue, especially in workplaces. There is no doubt that companies should give equal opportunities to everyone before hiring, but they should employ someone with professional skills and abilities,not on gender basis. I, generally, claim that the trend of having
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quivalent number of
men
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 and
women
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 in business has positive impacts on markets. To commence with, businesses with gender
equality
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 create a safer and healthier work environment. In past,
women
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 did not feel safe while going out for a job because of
men
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 domination in the market. In
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 a scenario, their hidden talents got wasted in the past, but now they are coming
up front
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 and playing a valuable role in running the offices or businesses successfully in all aspects, either financially and socially. In simple words, both
men
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 and
women
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 have different ideas and potentials regarding work, so having both equally in the offices would bring numerous proposals on the desk.
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, parents act as a role model for their children. In general
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words, when in society, both parents go for work, it will create an optimistic environment for kids too. As, in primary years of their childhood, they imitate their parents and follow their lifestyles. They will get a thought of
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 automatically in their mind, which
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 lead to their intellectual growth. To conclude, employing
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 same number of
men
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 and
women
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 definitely benefit society and workplaces.
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 advocacy will flourish the community in all sectors, and
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 bring prosperity and
equality
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.

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