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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years, the social class and material possession have become the most significant factor of the people’s individuality pushed to the background
such
 traditional values as honour, mind as well as trust. I partly agree with the statement since I do believe that the public was not so much spoiled by the technical progress.
Firstly
, the modern generation seems to be more materialistic than moral.
Likewise
, people are centralized on their social position, status and prestige among friends and colleagues. If the person has a wide range of wealthy clothes, things and accessories, the worth rate will be more attractive. A good illustration for
this
 is trends, namely iPhone, Gucci and Louis Vuitton, which determine a person’s material condition and the range of friends.
In addition
, the public frequently won’t pay attention to the person’s kindness as well as sincerity if he or she works as a waiter.
Thus
, the social position plays a vital role in the life-defining the attitude to the public.
Secondly
, there is an increasing tendency to return to the old-fashioned values in the business, relationship and friendship. In fact, choosing a partner for the whole life, people are looking for traditional standards to feel comfort.
Moreover
, the big companies, namely Google and Microsoft base their working atmosphere on beliefs
such
 as self-confidence, open-mind and sensibility. Eventually, all parts of the life which are connected with the communication are basing on values. In condition, technical progress has eased the acquisition of the rating raising the price of the material component.
Nevertheless
, morals still are of significant importance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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