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We are becoming less influenced by advertising now than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In present generation advertise play
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ost prominent role, in bringing out the product to
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ublic,
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 more and more people are
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 influenced by
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.
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involvement
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, there are many brands that are
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available
 in
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arket, in order to bring the subject into light,
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ompany need to make advertise it, by taking popular celebrities Citizens who
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 public figures as their role models follow what's been said by them, as
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 would increase the sale.
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 people tend to buy products which are not used on their daily basics. To
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elaborate
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, there are many promotions in televisions and
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nternet which
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 includes banners and sign, which tend to attract more customers and would be addicted to it. Unlikely in the past, if
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 subject is advertised, it would be only limited to
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ertain period, good-will would be generated to
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ompany based on word spread by mouth
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 if a buyer is satisfied with the object, likely he would be
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recommending
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, the sales would be driven inn slowly but there would be
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guaranteed
 profit. I
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undoubtedly
 agree that as
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advertisements
 increase, people would be annoyed by it, but in certain cases
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it may vary from one person to another. To conclude, in past
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advertisement
 are less
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influential
, but in today's world that would become a negative impact in the
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society
, as over publicity leads to loss of expectations.
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