In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

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growing number of graduates who are

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work experience. In the rural areas

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shall discuss the reason and what consequence that are faced, and how to solve the problem.

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, in most developing countries, there are

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rban and rural area,

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people

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would complete their highest qualification,

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if they want to

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more studies they have to move to

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, it is same when compared to employment they would to needing income for their survival.

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towns offer some jobs they are only limited to

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ertain level, and staff would not be able to see their personal growth.

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see more wages in the

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there are more number of consequences like

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being densely populated and

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ost of living rises, and

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in pollution and greenhouse gas effect.

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, if the same scenario arises there would be deserted rural, there would be no public transport and economic development. To conclude, the government should step forward and take necessary precautions like

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office, Information

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jobs, and educational sectors in an

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In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

Fully explain your ideas

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning your father language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight disadvantages?

More and more people these days work harder and longer hours and have no time for family life and friends. What are the causes in your opinion for this? How is it affecting family life and the society as a whole?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.