In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

In today's world
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there is
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growing number of graduates who are
unemplyed
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unemployed
, obviously looking for their
first
work experience. In the rural areas
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many people
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up and
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not find any suitable job in their
preffered
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preferred
field of study
hence
, they move to
cities
. In
this
following essay
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shall discuss the reason and what consequence that are faced, and how to solve the problem.
Firstly
, in most developing countries, there are
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rban and rural area,
poeple
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people
who grew up in the rural areas
,
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would complete their highest qualification,
thats
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that's
offered at their place
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if they want to
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more studies they have to move to
cities
.
Likewise
, it is same when compared to employment they would to needing income for their survival.
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towns offer some jobs they are only limited to
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ertain level, and staff would not be able to see their personal growth.
In addition
to that
empolyee
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employee
see more wages in the
cities
, and the
life style
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and culture would
also
be different.
As a result
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there are more number of consequences like
cities
being densely populated and
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ost of living rises, and
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spike
in pollution and greenhouse gas effect.
On the other hand
, if the same scenario arises there would be deserted rural, there would be no public transport and economic development. To conclude, the government should step forward and take necessary precautions like
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etting of
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office, Information
technology related
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jobs, and educational sectors in an
accessiable
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accessible
location.
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