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Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. You should write 180-220 words.

#people #charity #organizations #offer #country #aid
There are many charity
organizations
 in each
country
 and town, most of them help to
people
, who
lives
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 in their area.
However
, some
people
 think that they should help
to
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people
 who needed and wherever they live. So, who should we help? Earthquakes, tsunamis, volcano eruptions, hurricanes- they are natural disasters occurring in different place of our planet. Millions of refugees need aid and home, to live, not to survive.
Therefore
, most
of
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c
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harity
organizations
 want to help, want to give
a
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hope to
people
, who injured and give up wherever they live.
Organizations
support
people
 living in Africa, in war conditions, and in my viewpoint, we should help
to
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all needed
people
 to make a better life and to develop our society.
On the other hand
, if we want to make better or to improve society, which we live, we can start to do it in the place where we live.
People
 should get insight into that not only refugees
n
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eed
support
, if you want to go kind deals,
you can
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but you can also
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support
 poor families in your
country
. In my opinion,
people
 should start to help others in their own
country
, since, if all
people
 or all
organizations
support
people
 in own city doing kind deals, there will not
needed
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need
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 in all counties. To sum up, I want to say that charity helps not only who needed,
also
 it helps us and I believe,
all kind deals
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but all kind deals also
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 make us more useful for society and it is
not
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p
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a
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roblem to help
people
 in another
country
 or own city, most important thing that we
support
 them, we give them hope and learn to believe again.
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