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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It has been known for some time now that a move towards sources of
energy
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 which are not carbon-based is urgently required to stop the effects of global warming. In my view, there are too few
governments
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 who seem to be promoting the
use
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 of other types of
energy
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such
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 as
wind
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, wave, solar and nuclear sources of
energy
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.
Governments
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 at present are too reliant on
coil
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coal
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, oil and gas.
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 some
governments
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 are doing research into the
use
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 of alternative
energy
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 sources, many are not.
Energy
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 from the
wind
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, the sea and the sun does not pollute the environment and is an everlasting source of
power
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. Nuclear
power
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 is clean, and
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 it is not totally unproblematic, it would provide a large amount of
energy
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 and dramatically improve the environment. Countries
such
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 as France have made good
use
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 of nuclear
power
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. My feeling is that more
use
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 could be made of
wind
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power
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. In some countries, there has been a reluctance to
use
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wind
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 turbines, even in areas which are not densely populated, as some people believe they are eyesores. Personally, I believe they are not only useful
,
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 but beautiful as well.
Governments
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 should spend more time and effort promoting the benefits of
this
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 source of
energy
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 and trying to make the public understand the reason for
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the change
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. In conclusion, I believe that, if
governments
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 forced everyone to have a
wind
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 turbine and solar panels
on
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in
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 the building they live in, made more
use
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 of wave
power
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 and built more nuclear
power
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 stations,
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 they would manage to avert the dangers that are seriously threatening the Earth.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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