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Some people believe that famine is caused by climate change and preventing this will stop famine. What is your view of this? At least 250 words.

Climate
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Change
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 is the most significant problem
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 our century. The Earth’s temperature
change
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 led to bigger issues like Global Warming, Northern Pole glaciers melting, yet others claim that even
famine
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 is caused by condition differences. Thousands of
animals
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 and fishes lost their habitat due to the warming of the
climate
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. Polar bears counted as endangered because of massive ice melting at the Northern Pole. I believe in some way,
Climate
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Change
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 caused
famine
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 in the world because it damaged environments of
animals
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 causing misbalance in the ecosystem. Apparently, the loss of species of
animals
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, plants, and fishes creates
food
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 shortages, and the population of regions with severe conditions will suffer from that the most.
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, for cities located on the shore, the main
food
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 supply is fish, and as long as the sea level rising, fishes could not adapt to a new environment becoming extinct.
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, some populations of marine
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 disappear from the face of the Earth, causing
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ack of
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 and starvation around the globe. If people will find a solution to prevent temperature
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, the flora and fauna of Earth stay unharmed.
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, problems
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 as
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, habitat loss, extinction will not pose a threat to the planet.
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, heat variation is not the only reason for massive hunger, overpopulation creates a battle for
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, where losing ones starve.
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, in Africa, the biggest exporters in the world run their business, and thousands of locals work for them.
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, crops from land transported overseas leaving the local population with nothing, which brings out the statement that only those who can afford to buy
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 can avoid starvation.
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, countries with a stable economy and people who earn enough money could buy what they what to eat, where others try to survive. To sum up, global
famine
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 is connected to the environmental and social problem equally, but definitely preventing
Climate
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Change
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 can save people from great hunger because supplies will be enough for everyone.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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