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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is often said that working three or four days per week would be more useful than working
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hole week.
That is
 to say, they need to live their
life
 for themselves, make it more gripping and care about their health. Currently
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employees
work
everyday
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 with one or two days holidays and they try their best to finish their
work
 on
time
 which has an adverse impact on their health. I mean, if people
work
w
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hole day without any exercises by doing just one thing, they may have an ailment and shorten their
life
.
For instance
, modern office employees start their
work
 in the morning and finish in the evening with 1-2 hours of break. Obviously, they do not have
time
 to take care
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 their health.
Besides
, workers can not enjoy their
life
 while they
work
everyday
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. It is not fun and engaging if someone spends all his or her
time
 on their
work
. People should
work
 just to get an opportunity to live a fascinating
life
. Employees who
work
 whole day do not have
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time
 and energy to do their leisure activities as they spend their precious
time
 and energy to finish their
work
.
For example
, workers who do not have
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time
 or opportunity to get a holiday and go somewhere to fresh their minds because they do their best to do their
work
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good quality . In conclusion, it would be a good decision, if they plummet their
work
time
.
In other words
, it is a good notion to make people happier.
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