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Healthcare should be provided for free regardless of someone’s income. Do you agree?

#healthcare #someone’s #income
One of the major expenses that one has to incur today is medical expenses. Especially with the poor
worklife
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work-life
work life
 balance, many
people
 are becoming prey to
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ot of diseases. According to me,
healthcare
 is a facility
that is
 going to be required by everyone regardless of whether they are rich or poor, whether their
income
 is more or less.
However
,
people
 who earn well can look after themselves The population of our country is much more than the resources available
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 everyone. The distribution of
income
 is
also
 not equal. On one hand
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we have
people
drenhed
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drenched
dressed
 in money and
on the other hand
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,
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we have
people
 who
are just hand
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 to mouth. Due to
this
 inequality, a lot of
people
 whose
income
 is less do not have the money to treat themselves in case of any need. According to me, these
people
 should be helped with their
healthcare
 needs. For the
people
 whose
income
 is so much that they can take care of their requirements, I think they should be able to bear for their
healthcare
also
.
Hence
, according to me,
healthcare
 should be provided for free to only those
people
 who actually need it.
Submitted by madhav tripathi on

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