Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.

Children

should always be involved in some kind of

activities

. Other than the mobile phone. It is considered by some, that motivating the

children

to particulate in

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activities

is parents’ responsibility, while others believe that young adults should be well aware

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roductive utilization of their leisure. In

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essay both diverse

view points

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will be discussed,

Moreover

, in my opinion

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youngsters must know how to keep themselves busy.

To begin

with, in the past, teenagers and adolescents were a lot dependent on their parents in decisions making about their free

time

. Due to

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ack of easy internet access, a lot of physical

activities

like team

activities

were their leisure tasks.

This

makes them disabled in decisive capabilities,

therefore

they don’t feel the need to think themselves. While some young people are introverts and they need parental encouragement, but

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others should be left on their own.

For instance

, if parents don’t push their socially awkward or introvert offspring into team or group

activities

,

then

it would result in low confidence in them.

On the other hand

, living in the era of the big data, where all kinds of information are available at our fingertips,

thus

children

these days are quite well aware regarding the use of their available

time

. Numerous benefits are associated with

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.

Firstly

, the more they explore, the more they will find it easy to identify their areas of interest.

Secondly

, free

time

gives them breathing space to think out of the box,

thus

leading to innovation.

Finally

, it leads to building up their decision-making capabilities which youngsters of

this

generation

lacks

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. To illustrate the

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Bill Gates used to spend most of his

time

alone in his room, thinking and experimenting with his innovative ideas,

thus

he ended up development of the ‘Microsoft’. To conclude, I strongly believe that parents need to let their

children

free so that they could find a way out to enhance their capabilities during their free available hours. But

on the other hand

, they

also

need to keep an eye and push their shy and low confident younger ones

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public group gatherings, in order to fill their missing gaps.