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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the picture below are presented
two
 maps that show the
road
 access to a city hospital from
two
 different periods, 2007 and 2010. The city hospital on the Ring
Road
, as shown on the
apper
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upper
paper
 side of the picture that depicts the
area
 structure from 2007, had
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a verry
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verry
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very
 basic
ifrustructure
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infrastructure
 in that period. The facilities of the hospital included a few simple parts: the building of the hospital itself, the parking slots for the staff and public between City
Road
 and Ring
Road
, and six bus stops on the Hospital
Road
. Since 2007 the entire
area
 was changed
dramaticaly
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dramatically
. The parking
area
 was
separadet
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separated
separate
to
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into
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two
 different parking parks, one for the staff of the hospital and another for public use.
Instead
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,Instead
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 bus stops the bus station
was build
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was built
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 on the other side
that
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than
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is
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it
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 was before. In order to manage traffic properly in
this
 new busy
area
,
two
 roundabouts were
build
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built
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,
according to
 new
standarts
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standards
. As can be seen from the description, the new hospital's facilities have
advanced
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an advanced
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 and more appropriate structure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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