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Some people think parents are responsible for transporting their children to school. Others think it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many feel that
parents
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 should take their children to
school
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, while others feel
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 is a governmental responsibility. In my opinion,
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 is chiefly the duty of governments. Those who feel
parents
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 should be in charge of transportation to
school
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 argue
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 is an important element of family life. Most people have fond memories of their
parents
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 driving, walking, or taking public transport with them to
school
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 and
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 is a potential time for bonding. Early in the morning on the way to
school
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 children and
parents
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 are likely to be at their most energetic. After a long day at
school
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 and work, both parties will probably be tired or busy.
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 means the morning commute is an opportunity to catch up, make plans for the day, and enjoy each other’s company.
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, most families rely on government support in
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 area for a number of reasons.
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, many families lack the time to take their children to
school
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 in the morning.
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 is particularly the case if they have more than one child and they attend different schools. A parent living in a rural area,
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, might have to be at work early in the morning and simply does not have a flexible schedule to allow for multiple morning trips.
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, most people depend on
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 buses and consider
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 a key part of their tax contributions.
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 is particularly true for less privileged families, who might not have private transportation, or in single-parent homes where time is at a premium. In conclusion, the familial gains of a trip to
school
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 in the morning are outweighed by the very practical concerns of average citizens. Governments should continue to ease the burden on
parents
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 by providing transportation to and from
school
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsible for
  • transporting their children
  • sense of responsibility
  • involvement in their children's education
  • opportunity to bond
  • ensure their safety
  • demanding work schedules
  • lack the resources
  • access to transportation
  • promote equality
  • means to transport
  • government-provided transportation
  • reduce traffic congestion
  • carbon emissions
  • balanced approach
  • active role
  • subsidized transportation
  • public school buses
  • collaboration between
  • efficient and equitable system
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