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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#universities #colleges #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
Due to the effect of Corona Virus, most
of
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schools
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, especially the universities, have taught
students
 online.
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, there
are
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 some controversy about the education quality of online courses. In my opinion, I believe that the drawbacks of teaching online are much more than the advantages. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate from both sides, and prove my view by giving proper examples. It is true that
,
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 studying at
internet
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the internet
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 is the securest way for both tutors and
students
 under the global pandemic. Because the
less
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 people gather, the less probability to get the illness. Meanwhile, some applications for online course provide subtitle and playback, it is
benefit
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 for someone who
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 lack of language in their target country.
However
, it is the only advantage of web course at
this
 circumstance. There are many disadvantages we cannot avoid.
Firstly
, the
internet
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 is not always stable, especially for some foreign
students
. The unstable
internet
 will cause the professor
need
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 to use more time to illustrate one knowledge point than offline curriculum and reduce the interaction between
students
 and tutor.
Furthermore
, some
students
 cannot concentrate when they study online,
therefore
, the amount of knowledge they can absorb will
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.
In contrast
, there are various advantages of offline course. For some science majors,
for instance
, need to do a great number of experiments,
hence
, some undergraduates may choose their university for
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 lab. So, the face-to-face class can give the opportunity for
students
 to experience some scientific theories by using those facilities online to get a
further
 understanding of the knowledge of their majors. What is more is that
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 some universities may store some historical resource which cannot be found online, in the face-to-face curriculum,
students
 can use
this
 material as studying resource. In conclusion, all the above demonstrates that
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 the offline class is irreplaceable,
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 the developing of
internet
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the internet
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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