IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema.

#people #films #phones #tablets #cinema
These days
people
 have multiple platforms to watch a
movie
such
 as
phones
 and
tablet
 and so on a segment of society believe that we can see the film on
phones
 another individual believes that it is full enjoy to see e
movies
 in a
cinema
.
To begin
 with, nowadays Technology made everyone life very easy they don't need to go
cinema
 for
movies
 they can watch
movies
 at their home on horns they don't have to
to
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
need
Add the particle
toneed
show examples
 wait for tickets the more they spend on ticket their money they can get a subscription of Netflix can watch in a low cost they can watch a
movie
 on
phones
 comfortably by sitting on their beds for couches we can eat anything that we like to eat in a low-cost we can watch
movies
 in a cheap of cost hours with to eat in a low-cost we can watch
movies
 in a cheap of cost with our friends Hans it is the easy way to watch a
movie
 in a low price. In ,contrast watching a
movie
 on ,theatre it is very enjoyable because they use high Technology machines and sound system the
cinema
 is fully equipped most of the
people
 like to watch
movies
 on
cinema
instead
 of watching
movies
 on a
tablet
 because we can not watch
movies
 all the time on
phones
 and
tablet
 some time they got bored
people
 like to watch
movies
 with their friends on weekends
thus
, individuals can watch
movies
 without any interruption in
cinema
. In conclusion, it varies on
people
 on opinion, in my opinion, it is more interesting and joyful than watching
movies
 on Phone or
Tablet
.
Submitted by naresh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
What to do next:
Look at other essays: