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Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenager spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

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Some believe that all kids should be compelled to do some
work
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 with their
studies
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 in order to understand the
work
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 environment.
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because working while in schools enables children to perform better when they join the corporate world and
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 helps
students
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 to recognize their
field
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 of interest. Working while studying helps
students
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 to understand the world they will be in the future.
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 is to say that those
students
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 who
work
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 during their
studies
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 often do better in their
job
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 later than those who do not have any experience of working in a professional environment because they do mistakes in their early age and learn from those mistakes and get prepared for the
job
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 they will be doing after their graduation.
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, a recent survey of the Business Times revealed that 73 per cent of chances that the kid who did the
job
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 while in college will perform better than the child who did not opt for any
job
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.
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, too much load should not be put on the children shoulders
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 they would not be able to focus on their
studies
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. Doing the
job
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 while
studies
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 give
students
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 the opportunity to see the fields that will be more suitable for them after their
studies
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.
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 is because young people do not have any idea about working environment and they do not know in what
field
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 they should do their major in the university,
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, working in their early age gives them the opportunity to select the best suitable
field
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 for them.
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, when I started my university education I did not have any idea which subject I should have opted for my major. In conclusion, some people say all pupils should be forced to do some kind of
work
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 during their
studies
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, I agree with
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 opinion because it helps the pupil to recognize their
field
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 of interest better and prepares them to face the professional world.
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