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Nowadays, all new town planning should include public parks, shopping malls and sports facilities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#town #parks #malls #sports #facilities
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Planning of community is a widely discussed topic of the modern era. Increasing population is giving the alarm to humans to use resources as lower as they can. I totally agree with the statement of constructing public parks, shopping centre and athletics facilities in cities. Public parks are built to create a healthy relationship between municipality members. It gives children a place to play and others to form a connection with each other.
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 essential thing of township provides an important role in community engagement. Having a park far from the plan will make no difference because nobody likes to waste their time to go there. Shopping plaza and game facilities are like extracurricular activities. It makes a person creative and looks good. Having both of them inside the scheme encourages city members to use it for being fit and lean. Study shows that shopping market and fun facilities use an extensive amount of natural resources. If both of them are built inside the plan, the municipality can save a lot of resources and money which can be used at other places with low cost. Planners have to achieve various milestones in near future. If one wants success in
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 kind of planning, they have to think about including public parks, shopping plaza and athletics amenities into city planning.
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