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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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I think most
people
 who travel away from home for any length of time will feel homesick at the beginning because missing their own home and country is a natural reaction.
However
, I think it becomes less of a problem as
people
 adapt to the new environment and start to enjoy new relationships and experiences. Today many young
people
 study abroad and for
them
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 it is probably their
first
 time away from family, friends and everything
that is
 familiar. The country they have moved to may have
completely
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 different culture and language, so they need to adjust to
this
 and learn how to communicate in the ways.
This
 can be very tiring, but until they can do so, they will feel out of place and unable to form new relationships. Professionals who have moved abroad for work may have left older parents behind, or even young children. For
them
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 the separation can be worse because they feel so far from the
people
 they feel responsible for. I personally think that
people
 should try and prepare themselves
for
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 study or work abroad. They need to learn the new language and try to be as adaptable and independent as they can. At the same time,
however
, they need to set up ways of communication quickly and easily with
people
 back home, by using emails
for instance
, so that they know what is happening there and do not need to worry. If
people
 are aware of the problems, they can do a lot to reduce their homesickness and make their stay abroad a positive, exciting experience.
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