Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
consider the pursuit of an important career or high social status as the most important aspects of a person's
life
. Without
them
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living lose of meaning. In
this
essay
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I am going to opinion about
this
statement arguing that reaching work
success
is not the key
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in a
life time
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but a modern social misconception. A person's
life
does not
dipend
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depend

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on the kind of occupation or on the amount of salary earnt. Work has to be part of
people
's
life
but does not has to be the meaning of
life
itself.
Success
does not mean happiness and satisfaction.
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,
people
living great
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lifes
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like important actors, pop stars or entrepreneur are not
exept
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from depression and they are constantly living a more stressful
life
than what seems. Unfortunately, stars like Elvis
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Presley
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and Whitney Huston are two examples that a successful
life
does not
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employ
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. I think there are other aspects much more valuable and important than social
success
or good careers. Having
the
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knowledge about ourself as human and being kind and respectful toward other
people
are aspects that fulfil a
life
rather than career achievements.
People
who spend them
lifes
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travelling or doing
much
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humble jobs,
such
as farmers, they seem to have found the real key of living reaching a stable state of happiness. In conclusion, since we are child we grew with the idea that
success
in
life
is the direct correspond for a meaningful existence.
Unfortunately
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this
is just a misconception.
An
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higher social status may be more stressful and frustrating than simpler occupations, and
therefore
,
although
the higher salaries, spending an entire
life
following career goals or
success
will reduce
people
's existence into a less meaningful
life
than the others with less social status.
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