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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Globalisation gives people the possibility to travel around the world. Even difficult to reach parts of the world become attractive for tourist and many travel agencies sell unique experiences for a bunch of money. But what are the good and bad points about
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 of ,all I think, that people who live in difficult conditions, like a desert or Antarctic can
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 a chance for their children, who maybe are not able to visit other countries, to meet new human beings and learn about other cultures.
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more pollution. A good example is Mount Everest, on actual ,pictures there is a lot of rubbish and nobody tries to get rid of it. To ,summerise tourists can mean a good opportunity for
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 living in a rough climate if they do not leave the space polluted. They can enrich the local culture and the natives can be proud of their cultural history.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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