Some people think that young people should spend their free time with their families instead of enjoying outside entertainment. However, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Should
young
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people
spent their
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laser
leisure
time with their relatives?
This
is an important question for many teenagers and young adults. It
also
could cause a lot of
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discussions
discussion
in a family. How could
this
problem be solved
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First
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I give information about the
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agreeing
side. It is common to elders that they like to spend their time with the younger generations and
for example
tell them stories about the past.
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somtimes
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sometimes
this
is the only
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enjoyment
for the seniors in our population. So it is
naturally
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, that the would like to enjoy
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ourselves
selves
on selves
with other people.
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there are parents, who may
also
preffer
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prefer
their children to stay at home because
their
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need help with
every day
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chores and to look after the younger
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siblings
.
On the other
hand
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young people should be
abel
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able
to discover their
enviroment
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environment
, make new friends and become
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self-aware
.
This
could they only
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achieve
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when they leave their
familys
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families
family
and stand on their own
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feet
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. In my
opinion
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the truth is
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somewhere
between
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two options. I think that we could learn a lot from our relatives and
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preapering
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preparing
us for our
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future
. But on a certain
point
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it is
necessery
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necessary
to make own
expieriences
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experiences
without our families. Our lives are evolving with people
who
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we meet on our way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • relationship
  • communication
  • experience
  • learn
  • opportunity
  • exposure
  • culture
  • perspective
  • development
  • interest
  • skill
  • socialize
  • peer
  • broaden
  • horizon
  • opinion
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