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Some people think it is a good thing for senior managers to have much higher salaries than the other workers in a company. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, it is often argued whether it is fair for a
company
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 to provide high wages to a
person
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, who is at a senior managerial
level
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, as compared to the other employees.
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 essay agrees that organizations must provide handsome salary packages to a
person
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 depending upon
the
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their
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 seniority
level
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.
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, they have worked for many years to achieve
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 a high position and
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,
such
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 individuals have advanced academic
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level
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. Since individuals, who are managing a group of qualified people in a
company
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, have more
experience
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,
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; they deserve to obtain high remunerations.
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 is because an experienced
person
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 is often hired by an organization to manage other employees. If an individual has five to six years of
experience
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 in a field,
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 companies negotiate wages on the basis of their total work
experience
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. Which is a fair way to reward their hard work and expertise, which they obtain after working for years.
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, Maruti, which is a car manufacturing
company
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 has fixed the salary slabs of the employees on the basis of the full-time work
experience
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. Is there any other way to reward an individual? Certainly not! People, who are at a higher
level
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 in a
company
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 generally possess advanced degrees in their respective fields.
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 means that they have spent their financial resources, time and efforts to achieve
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 academic
qualification
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.
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,
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 individuals must receive lucrative salary packages from the
company
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.
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, Google, which is the world's largest software
company
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, offers a yearly package of one million to its managing director, Nelson. If a
person
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 wants to achieve a decent package in a
company
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,
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 he or she must possess advanced degrees.
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, people, who are
at
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 a higher position in a
company
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 as managers, must receive high salaries because they have a lot of
experience
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 and expertise in a respective field and they have
high-levellevel
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high-level
 degrees.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • justification
  • experience
  • responsibility
  • high-stakes decisions
  • motivation
  • incentive
  • wage disparity
  • morale
  • meritocracy
  • performance
  • contributions
  • company finances
  • employee development
  • research
  • expansion
  • alternative compensation structures
  • performance-based bonuses
  • profit sharing
  • dissatisfaction
  • retention
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