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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In the
next
 years, all
people
 will
be use
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 online
information
instead
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ofinstead
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 paper
information
 without any extra paying. I agree that
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 will be not necessary stuff in the future life. One justification is that globalization.
Every day
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people
 more and more be able
use
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internet
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the internet
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 without any warns. Even elderly ancestors try to use these new technologies. Citizens can exchange with
information
 from their countries to another.
Additionally
,
people
 who sell
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 might have got
information
 from the websites.
Therefore
, it is will be useless to pay extra money for
news
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the news
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.
On the other hand
,
problem
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 might
appears
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,
people
 every now and
then
 could encounter with poorness and they could not buy
radio
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a radio
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, or smartphone to take news from it, so they must purchase paper variant,
however
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 it is impossible
,
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 because
such
people
 could have radio borrowed or just have been invited by
neighborhood
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. To sum up all arguments above, I am comprehensively convinced that in the subsequent
years
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year's
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 newspapers will be useless and wasted money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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