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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays cars are an important part of our everyday life. In the
last
 years, due to easier mobility, the demand for cars has increased. But with the growing environmental conscience, many alternative laws and strategies have been made to encourage the population to use other eco-friendly means of
transport
.
Nevertheless
, I believe the regulation is crucial for the better future of our planet.
First
 and foremost, in the developed societies people are concern about the over-usage of vehicles and the long terms environmental consequences it might have.
Therefore
, many
countries
 have adopted several strategies to decrease the level of car ownership.
For example
, many Scandinavian
countries
 and some other Western European
countries
 are encouraging their citizens to commute with bicycles or have made subventions for the monthly tickets for public
transport
. Albeit
this
 can be only found in the rich, western societies.
However
, one of the biggest remaining issues is the lack of international laws regarding the ownership of cars. But, since the car industries are one of the most important sectors in the world economy and
thus
 represents a very important lobby in all international organizations and unions, it is hard to create a law that would manage to lower the ownership.
Therefore
, a balanced solution has been found, and many
countries
 have imposed higher taxes for an additional car purchase. To conclude, it makes it clear that an improvement has been done in
this
 field, albeit only in the Northern hemisphere. Even though the alternative means of
transport
 have increased in popularity, the total abolishment of wheel
transport
 cannot happen around the globe equally.
Thus
, to achieve a common goal both the rich and poor world should collaborate and invest more
into
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 education and the development of common strategies and laws.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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