IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

What is better: a job one likes or a job that pays well? Do you agree or disagree with these statement ?

#job
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There are different perspectives regarding whether it is better to choose a
job
Use synonyms
 we like or to opt for a
job
Use synonyms
 that gives us higher income. Some
people
Use synonyms
 believe that
one
Use synonyms
 should pursue a
job
Use synonyms
 they enjoy, others consider money as the
first
Linking Words
 determinant when it comes to choosing a
career
Use synonyms
. In my ,perspective both factors are important and should be considered equally important. According to some,
people
Use synonyms
 should follow their heart when it comes to choosing their future
career
Use synonyms
. They argue that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 who love their jobs are less likely to change
career
Use synonyms
 and will never get tired of their
job
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
, music producers spent their entire lives making music in their studio and are less likely to get tired and think of other
job
Use synonyms
 opportunities because they love what they do.
Although
Linking Words
 that must be true in some cases, the question is:are
people
Use synonyms
 who love their
job
Use synonyms
 be able to make enough money to make a living or they have to struggle their entire life for paying their day-to-day expenses? Based on the theory provided by the other group who advocate for well paid
job
Use synonyms
,
one
Use synonyms
 should opt for a well
job
Use synonyms
 option regardless of the
interest
Use synonyms
.They believe the main reason for working is to have a decent lifestyle, a big house, a fancy car, a big cash flow etc...According to them, when it comes to choosing a carrer,
people
Use synonyms
 should be prepared in advance and look for the
one
Use synonyms
 that has the highest wageh.
For instance
Linking Words
, some families force their kids to get high scores in high school preparing them for some handsome paid jobs like becoming doctors, dentists or surgeons. They do not consider the factor of inteters or
job
Use synonyms
 suitability. Are these group really happy and successful by some not even having
interest
Use synonyms
 in their jobs. Would they become good doctors or dentists ? As of me, I strongly believe we should amalgamate these two factors.
Job
Use synonyms
interest
Use synonyms
 and salary are both egually important when it comes to choosing a
career
Use synonyms
. If the
job
Use synonyms
 is satisfying and interesting but can not cover life expenses and lifestyle
one
Use synonyms
 aim,
then
Linking Words
 it is hard to survive in
this
Linking Words
 real world.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, if the
job
Use synonyms
 is providing enough money but not satisfying the
interest
Use synonyms
 of a person, it would be hard to hold and perfom it long term.
Therefore
Linking Words
, both components can and should be considered before searching an ideal
job
Use synonyms
 .
Submitted by armiario139 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: