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Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others are of the opinion that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that educating
children
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 to become good citizens is the teachers’ responsibility, while others believe
parents
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 should be the ones undertaking
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 job. I strongly feel that
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children
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 spend most of their
time
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 at schools,
parents
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 must be responsible for raising their
kids
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 according to the correct moral values. On the one hand, some people think that since
children
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 spend a great amount of
time
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 in the schools, it is the teacher’s job to make sure that the students learn how to become great citizens.
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 is because
parents
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 do not have enough
time
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 to provide their
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kids
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 knowledge regarding moral and ethical values as they are working. As an illustration of
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, several
parents
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 wake up early to go to work and when they arrive at night, their
children
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 are already sleeping.
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, It is the
parents
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’ responsibility to teach their
children
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 how to behave in the right manner in society because they were the ones who made a choice of building a family.
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, even though sometimes it is hard to balance work and personal life, mothers and fathers have to make
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 to help their
kids
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 to grow up and be exemplary members of the community they live in.
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, the burden of educating youth cannot be put on school teachers. In conclusion, whilst there will always be those who believe teachers are responsible for educating
children
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 about ethical and moral values necessary for life, I am
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convinced
 that
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 should be done by the
parents
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 as they are responsible for bringing up their
kids
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 in the best way.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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