Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree. Provide relevant example if necessary.

Nowadays jobs are easily available online, all are with their own offers either be with a huge
salary
or others with more holiday and offs. One might agree that a higher monthly income is more
favorable
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for workers than those with lower salaries but with better
job
fullfillment
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fulfilment
. I for one agree that
jobseekers
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job seekers
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do prioritize a higher income.
Firstly
, a higher
salary
is what drives a person to apply
in
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an institution. People,
specially
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new graduates tend to find
job
posts that have higher incentives and allowances.
As a result
,
job
seekers are motivated to
work
because they know that
however
hard
the
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work
they might have, it will be properly paid off.
For example
, persons who
is
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working in a factory tend to have higher product
ouputs
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outputs
if the plantation they
work
in pay by the number of finished items they made.
Clearly
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this
shows that people are more inspired to
work
if they are paid well. Another reason is that
,
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competition with a high paying
job
is tough, a lot of candidates are being interviewed for a specific position with a generous offer, sadly only a few are selected. There are some professionals who
does
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not even practice the profession they studied, eventually, they tend to join a different career that everyone usually
chase
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because it pays higher. As an example, In the Philippines nursing was in demand in 2011,
therefore
, other professions
such
as doctors and engineers would study nursing, just because the nursing profession was highly opted for in
first
world countries. Definitely,
this
is
a clear evidence
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that
jobseekers
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job seekers
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prioritize a higher
salary
. In conclusion, one would admittedly choose a high paying
job
,
than
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then
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a position at
work
which is easy going but has less
salary
. Because
,
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people nowadays are
money driven
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with
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by
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their daily activities and needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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