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People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Many people have a strong opinion that having
knwoledge
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knowledge
 in
English
 opens up their opportunities to a world of jobs
therefore
 improving their living standards. I partially agree
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this
 statement and would put forth my points in the paragraphs to follow. There are occupations that really run on how well one can converse in
English
. To get a breakthrough in
such
 organizations definitely needs a high rate of literacy in the
language
. The major yardstick with which an employee is measured would be the expertise they hold in
English
.
For example
, call
centers
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 function only on how well conversations in
English
 happen between a client and the staff.
Such
 companies recruit individuals only if they clear their
English
 test.
Such
work places
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 are ready to pay their employees more if they possess a good hold on the
language
.
This
 in turn improves the staff's living conditions.
On the other hand
,
English
 is just but another
language
. There are countries which have their own dialect which is important to them. Talking to residents of
such
 a nation in
English
 would lead you nowhere. Say, Germany is a nation that gives
preferance
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preference
 to
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 who could converse in German. It becomes important for one to converse best in a local
language
 to get appointed. Giving an interview to a German in
English
 would end up in nothing but chaos. To summarize,
English
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language
 is just another skill that could be
accquired
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acquired
 by anyone. Awareness of which no doubt gives an individual weightage, but not knowing it
also
 does not cut off opportunities for another.
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