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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is the view of some individuals that the purpose of
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education
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 is to assist graduates in obtaining better
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, while others contend that there are broader gains of higher
education
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.
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 essay with the notion that university
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 has more to provide to
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 than just
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 for passed out
students
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. Some people claim that the main goal of university
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 is to provide employment to
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it is how the economy will prosper. They argue that money is required for creating value in
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,
jobs
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 give young people a consistent purpose in life, which is essential to prevent them from engaging in crime.
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 is a very simplistic argument which fails to account for other factors on which creating value depends on.
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, In a survey of social scientists in Britain, 70% believed that we need to provide
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 with altruistic beliefs in order for them to effectively contribute to
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. The individuals who argue that a rounded development of
students
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 is essential, do so because they claim that only by helping each other will
students
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 be able to provide value to
society
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 in the long run.
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, 60% of
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, graduating
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 not invest the money they earn from their
jobs
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 back into the economy, which leads to a system of hoarding of wealth, which only helps certain individuals and does not benefit
society
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. To conclude, while assisting
students
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 in getting
jobs
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 is an essential component of university
education
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, we cannot ignore the altruistic element of higher
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. Relying solely on providing employment
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opportunities
 will lead to a
society
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 in which the people do not help each other.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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