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The government should make people take responsibility for their actions to the environment . To what extent do you agree.

#government #people #responsibility #actions #environment
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The way that the
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 deal with social and natural problems reflects in
people
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’s behaviour. Part of the population believes that the
government
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 should not make
people
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 take
responsibility
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 for their
actions
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 regarding the
environment
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 while others claim that
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 should be mandatory in order to prevent more natural damages.
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 essay will explore both perspectives and stand for those who defend that
people
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 should be charged for their
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, especially the ones related to environmental issues. On the one hand, supporters of not
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charging the population
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 to their
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 regarding nature claim that
people
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 cannot be aware of all the consequences that their
actions
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 might generate.
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, another argument is that only the
government
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 has the correct tools to educate
people
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 and develop policies in order to stimulate society to take care
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 manage properly their natural resources.
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, the
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 of Canada had been awarded three times in previous United Nations conferences for their effectiveness
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in educating
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people
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 and taking
responsibility
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 for diminishing environmental problems.
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, the necessity of creating an efficient policy to manage millions of
people
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 might be extremely expensive and not affordable for the majority of countries throughout the world.
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,
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transferring
responsibility
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 to individuals, punishing the ones that commit crimes against the
environment
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, seems more convenient and practical. To illustrate that situation, countries that created severe penalties for those who damage the
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,
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 as Russia, had satisfactory results combating deforestation and
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illegal
 commerce of endangered species. To conclude,
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 it is possible to point out some benefits of making the
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 taking
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 for
people
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’s
actions
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 regarding the
environment
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, it is more practical and affordable
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for
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 individuals.
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