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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There are a number of
people
 who subscribe to the view that ancient values,
such
 as honour, kindness, generosity have become meaningless, while the amount of money and properties are vital / essential things. In the
last
 decades, there is some truth in respect richer
people
 has increased speedily. Everyone wants to be rich and famous, but it does have its downsides. And the growing number of wealthy humans want respect from
people
. There are good points and bad points of being wealthy
people
. During our life, we encounter some rich
people
 who neglect inferior individuals. Neglecting
people
 is one of the drawbacks of theirs and
also
 they have a lot of money, but they don't share their wealth with anyone and do not assist their own family members. They only think of themselves. There is no doubt,
people
 do not respect
this
 type of
people
.
However
, sometimes we face wealthy folk whо assist
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society with their charitable expenditure and
also
 good manner. Their behaviour is one of the signs of their worth. In my opinion, some examples of
such
 individuals are actors who organize benefaction for children in orphanages, nursing homes and low-income families. After that, charitable humans acquire many blessings from
community
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. Nowadays, the most number of
people
 are forgetting traditional articles,
such
 as the best manner, tenderness, that with each other. In my cognition, it all starts with the family. So,
firstly
 family members ought to good terms with each
others
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, be helpful. We should leave good manners for new generations. Good behaviour,
for instance
, kindness tenderness honour,
trust
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a trust
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 which is a traditional heritage for young generations. To conclude, it is true that day by day
people
 replace their old-fashioned values for social status. So, sympathy, generosity our features of personality and we do not forget it
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