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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? what could the government do to reduce this problem?

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People are facing a difficult situation while moving from
place
 to
place
 in city areas due to the reason for
traffic
congestion
.The essay will scrutinize some of the causes and remedial solutions to these problems.
First
 and foremost,an increase in the use of private
vehicles
 has become a major problem for
traffic
congestion
.It means,most of the people are involved in different kinds of job and career ,so,they are preferring private
vehicles
 to commute to their
work
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workplace
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place
.
In addition
 to
this
,the maximum number of employment opportunities are available in the city areas which is leading toward more crowd in those
place
,which is making inappropriate for pedestrians as well as the public to move around.
For example
,most of the roads of the capital of every country are packed with private
vehicles
,masses and public
vehicles
 due to the reason of many governmental works can be done from there only.
Therefore
,movement in
such
 places is always arduous for everyone. To cope with these difficulties,the use of
the
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public
vehicles
 should be promoted where same space covered by private
vehicles
 can adjust many public
vehicles
.In regard to
this
,the high number of passengers can travel in a vehicle at a time,
however
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 in private
automobiles
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,automobiles
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 only one or two people can travel which is causing more
traffic
congestion
.
In addition
 to
this
,the government should plan urbanization in a sustainable way so that it will reduce the number of
vehicles
 as well as the public crowd in the city areas. In conclusion,outnumbered private
vehicles
 which everybody are selecting for travelling is
inresulting
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resulting
in resulting
traffic
congestion
 which can be minimized by promoting masses to use public
vehicles
 if it is possible and
also
 bureaucrats can play a vital role by planning urbanization in a sustainable way.
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