Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Should
teenagers
be required to unpaid
work
in time, when they are not studying? Should they do any
community
work
for no
money
? In my
opinion
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the answer is absolutely clear and it is – no. I strongly believe that unpaid
job
does more harm than benefits. Each
job
must be paid. It does not matter whether it was done by
adult
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or by a teenager or child. The
job
that is
paid well is always done more accurate and clear. Some may argue that
children
can do
this
unpaid
work
for some reasons but I totally disagree with those statements. Paid
job
is a good way for
teenagers
to learn some aspects of adult life. If they learn it in childhood it would be easier for them when they grow up. Of
course
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job
for
community
benefits both
teenagers
and
community
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the community
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. But it does not cancel the fact that unpaid
job
is wrong.
For
example
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parents can give some
money
for
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children
who do any
community
work
. So
teenagers
would be able to help the
community
and at the same
time
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they will earn their own
money
. It will help them in their future
,
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when they would not underestimate their capabilities. They will
also
learn that
money
are not so easy to earn as they may think. I have no doubt that it will improve relationships between parents and their
children
. In
conclusion
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I would like to say that parents should pay their
children
’s unpaid
community
work
if they want their
children
to grow mentally health and hardworking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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