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More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

#people #drugs #alcohol #law
In a modern world,
drugs
 are the biggest problem for
asociety
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a society
society
 which cause some dangerous results like murder, injuries and thefts. In the
last
 decade, there is a surge in the invention of new
drugs
,
community
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the community
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 invented some new type of
drugs
 which is a very harmful effect on the human brain. A young generation is taking more alcohol as
compare
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 to elders because they inspired by their age group
people
 for taking
drugs
.
Moreover
, adult age group is easily deflected towards bad habits because they have
phobia
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a phobia
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 about making fun in their friend circle and for showing other
people
 , they do hard
drugs
 and after
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sometime
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 they are habitual for taking
drugs
.
Other
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 root cause for
this
 problem is parents.In
this
 busy world , caretakers do not have time to spend with their children and they do not care about their feelings. They are irresponsible towards adults. There are some organizations which
helps
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people
 to get rid
from
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of
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 bad habits like
drugs
 and alcohol. The most powerful tools to decrease
this
 problem
from
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in
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 society is education. There should be particular chapters in school which giving information regarding
adverse
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the adverse
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 effect of alcohols. A
cenema
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cinema
 can
also
 play a virtual role to remove
this
 obstacle , they can make a movie on behave of true stories of
people
 like how they destroy their life and family due to these bad habits. They can take a live
examples
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 from prison and show how prisons lose their mind and did a crime when they are drunk. In a nutshell, education and
audio visual
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audiovisual
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 aids are
most
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 efficient method to remove
this
 issue to safe our society and
young
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the young
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 generation.
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