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The growth of online shopping one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 era of technology, online shopping is mushrooming day by day. Owing to
this
, it will result in shutting down of all the goods related shops in the market, situated in towns as well as cities. I am in the consent of the rendered notion and
this
 essay will
further
 analyse some of the supportive points in order to prove my stance. To commence with, there are different kinds of reasons why people prefer to purchase multifarious of goods from online nowadays. Indeed, there is no doubt that they prioritize to buy
things
from
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online because of
the
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 comfort zone.
In other words
, individuals can own
things
 by staying at home without any disturbance to their schedule and in
this
 way they can save their time which they can invest for some other essential work. To exemplify, in 2020 as the pandemic arose every
individuals
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 had not been allowed to go outside except
from
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important work, so online shopping applications helped a lot to everyone for the shopping purpose.
In addition
 to
this
, having
discount
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 on expensive or branded products are
the
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another major reason to buy
things
 online. To elaborate it more, numerous online shopping applications are available on
internet
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 which
impart
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 satisfactory discount on various products as compared to the market.
Moreover
, on many special occasions, more discount is provided to the customer, that they get attracted towards
the
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online shopping. Amazon, as an instance,
lessen
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 the costs of all the commodities they have in their stock, on the Holi and Diwali like festivals in India, so that the customers get forced to own
things
 from their application. which proved disadvantageous for the local markets, as an outcome. In conclusion, I believe that masses in today's era, like to do online shopping as they can do shopping from any location, and due to huge discounts on several
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kinds of stuff
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stuffs
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 they tend to do shopping from online. .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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