Some believe that teenagers experiences most happiness moments in their life while others believe that adults experience more happiness, inspite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

What
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phase of
life
brings more
happiness
in our lives
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divides
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section
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.Some people believe
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the teenage period whereas others say its the adulthood.
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am of the opinion that teenage phase is the best
time
one could ever have.
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as well. It goes without saying that teenage
days
are the best
days
of our
life
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as are young,
restlessand
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restless and
carefree.In those
days
all we need to worry about attending schools and finishing homework on
time
,we do not have to worry about familial responsibilities and other things
such
as earning money, performing errands and so on.Above all,the best part of that
time
was we could
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with our friends anytime after coming back from schools and colleges.To quote an instance,
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fondly remember
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used to play
lot
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of outdoor games with my friends during summer holidays in the playground
nearby
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my home.Those were the glory
days
indeed. On the
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other
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there is a school of thought that
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that age is just a number and
happiness
is something that lies within.As to say,one can experience
immence
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immense
happiness
in their
adult hood
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adulthood
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because when we grow up and enter adulthood,we can have full
understandig
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understanding
of what is going on around us and that brings more emotional
happiness
that they cherish for their entire
life
.No doubt we are burdened with many responsibilities but being responsible for near and dear ones brings great joy for many people.
For example
,when a father helps his son in taking his
first
step he feels proud and honoured and we cannot compare his level of
happiness
with anything else. To conclude,what makes us happy is very subjective.
However
,childhood
days
outweigh
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adulthood
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period in terms of gathering beautiful memories that we cherish for
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a life
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life
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lifetime
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time
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