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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a work place every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the lifestyle of people has changed completely than in the past. There are many alternatives available for individuals for selecting their
work
 location. Some believe that there are a lot of benefits when employees worked at
home
instead
 of working at the office. Personally, I strongly agree with
work
 from the
home
 strategy. There are many pros to it than cons.
To begin
 with, the
first
 reason why people should
work
 from
home
 is that it makes them feel comfortable. Because employees do not need to spend
time
 on transportation, it can reduce mental stress caused by crowded situations and hectic schedules which often makes them angry and annoying by the
time
 they reach office. One can effectively use
this
 saved
time
 on capability development.
Moreover
,
this
 will
allows
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 enough free hours for pursuing creative ideas and hobbies.
For example
, my sister used to
work
 at the office but due to COVID-19, her employer allowed her to
work
 from
home
.
This
 manipulation of the
work
 location has a positive impact on her as she is not only able to complete her assigned tasks but
also
 able to spend the remainder of her
time
 with her kids. She can wake up late and use the moment for staying with herself. It helped her to be more motivated and happy.
Furthermore
, the
second
 striking reason is that it has
became
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ver
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 easy to manage the conferences from anywhere.
This
 is possible because of advancements in internet technologies and efficient audio and video conferencing tools. Virtual meetings have become a more common thing in usual workday now. Employees can stay at
home
 and still get in touch with their customers as well as their colleagues with ease without dropping the quality of interactions. Only occasional face-to-face meetings are necessary to keep the personal touch in-tact.
For instance
, my brother has been working from
home
 since COVID-19 outbreak. He can still do his training and daily
work
-related meetings with the same fluency as in the past. Working from
home
 did not change it a single bit. It only made his life easier. In conclusion, working at
home
 is the best solution for employment. They can gain many benefits from working online.
This
 can make them have more conveniences and allows them to be a well-organized workforce.
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