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THE CONSUMPTION OF THE WORLD’S RESOURCES (OIL AND WATER ETC) IS INCREASING AT A DANGEROUS RATE. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES AND SOLUTION

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It is undeniable that humans are consuming natural nonrenewable assets at an extremely fast rate and we must warn our society about the life-threatening effects of
this
 problem. There are many factors which are causing
this
 problem and
this
 essay will discuss causes as well as solutions.
Firstly
, the main reason is population growth. Humans are multiplying every year, and the birth rate is more compare to the death rate. To feed a big society, we have to produce more food and other essential products which are very important for the survival of living being. Suppose
next
 year world population will increase by 1 million. It means
next
 year we will need more water and factories will use more nonrenewable things to manufacture more products to satisfy the needs. Another problem that needs to be considered that many individuals are not aware of
this
 fact that they are overusing these
resources
. One immediate practical solution is to reduce
this
 trend, every nation must pass legislation to control population growth. In
this
 way, in the
next
 ten ,years there will be less burden on the world’
resources
.
In addition
 to that, we should spread awareness in our society via newspapers and social media about the importance of these
resources
 and should try to teach them to use these reservoirs responsibly. In conclusion, nature gave us these
resources
 for our survival not for our greed and we should use these
resources
 to fulfil our essential needs. If we will not stop
then
 in the
next
 few years many countries will not have water, coal, and oil.
As a result
 of
this
, the
next
 generations will have to go to the museum to see these materials.
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