nowadays many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of their life, however, only a few achieve it. What are the problems in doing this and what solutions can you suggest?

Most
people
are struggling from trying to implement
balance
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between their jobs and their day to day lives, and only the minority can implement
this
lifestyle. Several factors contribute to
this
problem.
This
essay will examine those problems and come up with some solutions. It is undeniable that making a living is becoming challenging especially for medium to lower society
work
class. Some
people
have to
work
in more than one jobs in order to
support
their families.
This
can make them
work
longer
hours
and not be able to enjoy other aspects of their lives.
For instance
, my friend is working at Walmart during the day and in order to be able to
support
her family as
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single
mom, she is working as an Uber driver
over night
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. She
doesn
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does
not have
time
to enjoy her
life
. Another reason why
people
have
hard
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time
to adjust their
work
and
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time
is that some
work places
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workplaces
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do not
support
them.
For instance
, long
hours
of
work
in some private factories with no annual vacation
time
, make some workers
work
over
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time
and sometimes one person
work
in lieu of two. If they do not follow the
work
style, they would get fired. As can be
seen
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it is becoming extremely hard for some who
work
hard and those who have no
support
from their workplace to maintain
this
balance. The solution would be for governments to employ mandatory vacation
hours
for all the employees no matter what kind of job
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doing and how much they are making.
This
will allow them to take some
time
off
work
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and
enjoy spending
time
with their friends and families. Another solution will be to make sure employees and workers have access to some free services like gym and restaurants ' vouchers once in a while making sure they enjoy other aspects of
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their
lives.
For instance
, Home Depot
provied
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provided
provide
a free gym pass for those working 8
hours
plus in their warehouses
accross
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across
BC in 2015 in order to provide
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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to be active and enjoy
life
outside
work
. To sum up, only
few
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people
can
truely
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truly
make
balance
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a balance
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between their job and their
life
. The majority who cannot have
this
privilege are those who have to
work
over-
time
or in different jobs and the ones with no
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workplace
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support
. To tackle
this
problem
goverment
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government
should
provides
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mandatory holidays for employees and
also
companies should help
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fascilities
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facilities
to make sure their workers are having access to tools that can make them happy outside
work
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