Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is thought by some
people
that the communication between family members
has deteriorated recently. In my opinion, I completely agree with this
statement because of extended work hours
and geographical separation.
Firstly
, young professionals spend the majority of their time
working rather than hanging out with their family, especially their parents. In the past, the average working hours
was less than 40 hours
per week, so people
had spare time
on meeting their parents. However
, this
is no longer a lifestyle at the moment. Young workers usually works
way over 40 Change the verb form
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hours
in
a week, which leaves them less Change preposition
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time
on
chatting with their parents.
Another point to consider is that living far away from other family Change preposition
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members
discourages people
to get in touch. Because of
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a
long-distance communication which is often less effective than a face-to-face conversation, it decreases the excitement of having a conversation with other family Remove the article
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members
. In other words
, both parties involving in the discussion feel less attached because they cannot see others' body language which is crucial for an
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Therefore
, people
do not want to communicate frequently when they live apart from each other.
In conclusion, family members
spend much less time
on
meeting family Change preposition
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members
due to long hours
of work and locations. In the future, technology will hopefully encourage people
to connect with their family members
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