Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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people
that the communication between family Use synonyms
members
has deteriorated recently. In my opinion, I completely agree with Use synonyms
this
statement because of extended work Linking Words
hours
and geographical separation.
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Firstly
, young professionals spend the majority of their Linking Words
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working rather than hanging out with their family, especially their parents. In the past, the average working Use synonyms
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had spare Use synonyms
time
on meeting their parents. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
this
is no longer a lifestyle at the moment. Young workers usually Linking Words
works
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in
a week, which leaves them less Change preposition
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time
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on
chatting with their parents.
Another point to consider is that living far away from other family Change preposition
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members
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people
to get in touch. Because Use synonyms
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a
long-distance communication which is often less effective than a face-to-face conversation, it decreases the excitement of having a conversation with other family Remove the article
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members
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In other words
, both parties involving in the discussion feel less attached because they cannot see others' body language which is crucial for Linking Words
an
effective communication. Remove the article
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Therefore
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people
do not want to communicate frequently when they live apart from each other.
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members
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time
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on
meeting family Change preposition
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members
due to long Use synonyms
hours
of work and locations. In the future, technology will hopefully encourage Use synonyms
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to connect with their family Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite