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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #subjects #people #waste #time
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Education
 is
such
 a possession which never lets the possessor down. It does
pay back
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 in some way or the other. It is due to
this
 reason that it is kept at a very high pedestal and only contributes to the widening of the horizon of the possessor. Due to
this
 firm fact, it can be said that
education
 earned by studying any kind of
subjects
 is never ever a waste of time. It only adds up to the total personality of an individual and makes him a matured, understanding and a complete human being.
However
, there are other schools of thoughts who are of the view that the pupils must not be taught the
subjects
 in which they have no interest
in
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. According to their belief,
this
 only contributes
towards
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 the wastage of time. They believe in the theory that the students must be made to study the
subjects
 which are liked by the students. Unfortunately, the followers of the
second
 school of thought invariably tend to forget the fact that the thought process of a
student
 is too narrow, too limited due to the immaturity level where the
student
 tends to stand at
such
 a tender age. The
mind
 of a
student
 is just like
a clay
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 which can be moulded in either way. In
such
 a scenario, if the child is given the freedom to study the
subjects
 according to their liking, the changes of a tender
mind
 to get lost in the world of fantasy would lead the nation towards a horrific and unpleasant future. The
mind
 of a
student
 is as holy as Bible, as sacred as
temple
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 and if
such
 a
mind
 is guided in the right direction, by making him understand the potential of
education
 possessed (by studying even the
subjects
 which they do not like), the future of not only the
student
 but the nation
also
 shines. It is only
education
 which encourages mankind to labour in
present
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 in order to enjoy the fruits in future. In a recent interview a prospective candidate, who had applied for the immigration to a country, did share his experience
where
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 the
subjects
 which he had no interest in studying did contribute and acted as a saviour for him to gather the ‘points’ for the educational qualifications. The article in the fortnightly published magazine, The Immigrants,
further
 discussed his getting successful in achieving his goal due to the accrual of those ‘points’ which he got due to
such
education
. In the end, I opine in favour of studying any kind of
subjects
 because it is the
education
 which is dearer than the fine opals, more precious than Emeralds and places a person above all.
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