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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Several
people
 subscribe to the view that ancient values,
such
 as
honor
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, kindness, generosity have become meaningless, while the amount of money and properties are vital things. I feel that I must take issue with
this
 point of view and I will analyze the issues below. In the
last
 decades, there is some truth in respect richer
people
 has increased speedily. Everyone wants to be rich and famous, but it does have its downsides and the growing number of wealthy humans want either likes or respect from
people
. There are good points and bad points of being wealthy. During our life, we encounter some rich
people
 who neglect inferior individuals which is one of the drawbacks of theirs. They have a lot of money, but they don't share their wealth with authority and do not even assist inferior capability members of their family. They only think of themselves. There is no doubt,
people
 do not respect
this
 type of
people
.
However
, sometimes we face wealthy
people
 whо assist the society with their charitable expenditure and
also
 good manner. Their
behavior
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 is one of the signs of their worth.
Such
 as actors organize benefaction for children in orphanages, nursing homes, and low-income families in different celebrities. After that, charitable humans acquire many blessings from
people
. Nowadays, the most number of
people
 are forgetting traditional articles,
such
 as
best
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 manner, tenderness, that with each other. In my cognition, it all starts with the family. So,
firstly
 family members ought to good terms with each other, be helpful. We should leave good manners for new generations.
For instance
, good
behavior
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, kindness, tenderness,
honor
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, trust which is a traditional heritage for young generations. To conclude, it is true that day by day
people
 replace their old-fashioned values for social status but sympathy and generosity are our features of personality and we should not forget them.
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