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Digital communication technology, such as email,instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that new technologies have had an influence on
communication
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 between
people
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 around the
world
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. I think that while
technology
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 makes
communication
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 easier than before, it is no substitute for face-to-face
communication
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. On the one hand, new digital
technology
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 has several advantages of improving
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 between
people
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 in the whole
world
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.
Firstly
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, it allows
people
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 to communicate with others no matter what time.
For example
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, nowadays
people
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 could contact others by texting messages and sending emails
instead
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 of writing letters by hand which has certain timeliness.
Second
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, it not only allows
people
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 to communicate with domestic
people
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 but
also
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 enable them to contact
people
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 all over the
world
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 at the push of a button.
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, digital
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 makes
people
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 get in touch with someone without any charge, they do not have to consider the postage fees which allowing
people
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 to contact someone more frequently.
On the other hand
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,the effect that social media,
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 as Facebook have had on society and local connections can only be seen as negative. Rather than individuals taking part in their local community, they are
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 choosing to take more interest in
people
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 online.
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,
although
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people
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 have thousands of friends in a virtual
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, they do not know about each other in reality, even do not meet each other, just waste their productive time.
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, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as
people
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 spend more time online with
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 they have never met face to face. In conclusion,
although
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 modern
technology
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 has brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same effect on society or local community.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous communication
  • geographical barriers
  • sense of community
  • efficiency
  • quick responses
  • frequent interactions
  • maintenance of relationships
  • over-reliance
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial connections
  • immediacy
  • non-verbal cues
  • misinterpretation
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