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University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether or not
university
students
 should only focus on their field of expertise or other
subjects
 as well, is a heated debate. I strongly believe that
students
 should focus on just
one
 major
subject
 even though I agree that they
also
 should study a range of
subjects
.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons which are important when considering the
students
’ study in
one
 only major.
First
 and foremost,
students
 can become experts if they study about
one
subject
.
Moreover
, they allocate their time and energy to the
subject
 which is a passion for them, which is believed to result in a huge success.
Also
, provided that they are able to concentrate on only
one
subject
, they can go into
an
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employment by impressing recruiters.
As a result
, they can gain a high-paid position in
this
 field
thus
 these people feel pretty confident.
On the other hand
,
university
students
 are supposed to be encouraged to learn a variety of
subjects
 and explore their
skills
 at the
university
.
Firstly
, before
students
 graduate from
university
, they can gain experience in other
subjects
 which are not the student's
specialty
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.
This
 way, they ameliorate their communication
skills
, understanding
skills
 and problem-solving
skills
.
This
 situation makes
advantage
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 for both their employment and their social life. Take people who go into a job as an example; if they cannot find employment in their profession, they can get any job in relation to their other
subjects
. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion in the light of the information given above and I think that being an expert about
one
 only major brings them success even though I agree that studying a range of
subjects
 is beneficial for
university
students
.
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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  • specialized knowledge
  • technologically advanced
  • innovation
  • expertise
  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • adaptability
  • competitive edge
  • dynamic job market
  • singular focus
  • mental health
  • personal development
  • diverse curriculum
  • self-awareness
  • elective courses
  • primary subject
  • blending
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