Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays technology is increasing day by day which helps the life of
people
with many inventions
such
,as social networking
sites
however
many
people
think that it will have a huge negative
impact
on both individual as well as on society I am a partially agree and disagree with it
To begin
with,there are lots of negative
impact
on both individual and society
firstly
, it is a wastage of time because if
people
started watching any video or photos on social
sites
and they will forget all their work and remain busy in chatting.
Secondly
,it will cause various health issues.
For instance
,if
people
will continuously watching videos
then
it will give
harmful
Add an article
a harmful
show examples
effect
to
Change preposition
on
show examples
their eyes.
furthermore
, there are many illegal organisations that spread fake news
across
Change preposition
apply
show examples
all over the world through
social
Add an article
the social
a social
show examples
site which will cause violence like, in
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
2011 one person upload photo of
demolished
Add an article
a demolished
the demolished
show examples
mosque on Facebook which
cause
Change the verb form
causes
show examples
riots between Hindus and Muslims On the
otherhand
Correct your spelling
other hand
,there
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
also
some positive
impact
.
first
of all,it will Helpful For those
people
Who are living far away from their family to connect with them
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
face to face
For
Add the comma(s)
,For
show examples
example,In COVID-19 many students and employees who are living In
outside
Add an article
the outside
show examples
city alone they can easily talk to their family and see their faces.
secondly
,social networking
sites
are
also
useful for
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
people
to know about the current affairs of all over the world. To conclude,if the social networking
sites
have
positive
Add an article
a positive
show examples
impact
then
it will
also
have negative
impact
means,if we will use in limit
then
it will be helpful
although
if we will use in excess
then
it will be harmful
Submitted by rajeev kumar on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: