In the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation out-weigh the disadvantages?

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The proportion of elderly people in some countries

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is considerably higher while in other regions young people comprise the highest percentage of the total population. Having a larger youth population is considered to have more advantages for a nation, and I think that a

country

should have more adolescents for

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faster

development

To begin

with, the current generation is dynamic, energetic and can contribute to the job sector which has a huge positive impact on the economic

development

of a province. They come with fresh ideas and are free from old superstitions and traditional beliefs. It gives them a competitive advantage. Educated teenagers are

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best resource a

country

can have, and their contribution to the

country

is significantly higher than the participation of aged people.

Also

, the younger generation can grasp new technology faster which is the need of the hour for a

country

’s

development

. They bring in fresh talent and ideas which lead to economic growth.

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technology

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sector is full of fresh minds leading to global

development

. On the flip side, it could not be denied that the older generation

have

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already contributed to reforming the

country

. They have vast wisdom and experience that could help in vital decision making. They are often considered a better fit for decision-making positions. To conclude, senior citizens should not be considered a burden to the society,

however

, young blood

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more to contribute to the nation as a whole and

that is

why it is beneficial for a kingdom to have an active workforce.

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In the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation out-weigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environment problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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